RtgDir review: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13.txt


Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see ​http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft.

Document: Effect of Pervasive Encryption on Operators - draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13
Reviewer: Ines Robles
Review Date: 12-11-2017
Intended status: Informational

Summary:
This document discusses current security and network management practices to help guide protocol
development in support of manageable, secure networks.

The draft is ready, few typos found.

Comments:

I believe the draft is technically good. This document is well written and clear to understand.

Major Issues:

No major issues found.

Minor Issues:

Section 2:

"... Following the Snowden revelations,..." => It would be nice to add some references here

Section 2.2.5:
"DRM..."=> I would expand it to  Digital Rights Management (DRM)

Section 6:

inlcudes=> includes

Section 6.1:
"information For example" => period missing?

Section 6.2:
"soltuions" -> solutions

Section 7.1 title:
"Encypted" => Encrypted